just like the windIs my story any good? Just the first part. ?

The water was deep and frosty in the cool winter chill. ?Its crystal clear surface, untouched by the bitter wind, reflected the wintry scene above of moonlight and snow covered trees perfectly. ?Not a drop of ?snow or ice on the banks surrounding the pond touched the smooth and flawless surface of the water. ?Not a single ripple or wave stroked its beautiful surface. ?In short, the tiny pond that sat in the middle of the forest was perfect in every way.
?“Relax, Cami. ?Drowning won’t be that painful. ?Besides, if this works-and it will, I’ll be just fine.” ?Caleb, like always, was being a stupid, fat-headed idiot. ?He knew that there would be no way he would ever survive if he jumped into the freezing water: it just like the windwas just too cold. ?He would die in less than a minute after he jumped, but that was what he was counting on. ?He wanted, desperately, to die.
?Again, like always, it was up to me to fix his mistakes, but it would way easier for me if he didn’t do it. ?I mean, just because I can’t die doesn’t mean I like jumping into a pond in the middle of winter to save my little brother. ?You see, he thinks he’s a witch, or rather a warlock, and that explains why he never dies in these stupid little stunts. ?In reality, I’m the witch (immortal, of course) who always has to drag his annoying butt out of trouble.
?“Caleb, don’t be an idiot,” I pleaded with him from where he had me chained to a dying oak tree beside the water. ?“just like the windCaleb!” I called, but he was too busy tying a fifty pound weight to even bother and answer. ?Geesh, what was with his suicidal self?
?“Cami, come on. ?You know what is going to happen.” ?Yes, I did know what was going to happen, even better than he. ?“You’ve seen it before. ?I’m going jump in and die, but I will come back when my magic powers save me.” ?See what I mean? ?Magic powers?
Trying to persuade some sense into his little brain, I told him the truth, or as much of it as I could.
?“Caleb… you don’t have magical powers. ?You’re too old to believ
Not to bad....
wow, you have really good descriptive detail and imagery! Just clean up some of the dialogue in the beginning and it will be awesome. goodd job :)